07-25-2013, 03:12 AM 
	
	
	
		Hi, this made me chuckle. The last resort when writers block sets in. There are some elements that I like, but I think it would read better with more punctuation. I know everyone has their own thoughts about whether poems work with or without punctuation, but I think especially in the middle two stanzas punctuation could control how it comes across and emphasise the train of thought aspect. 
War and love letter were obviously chosen for a good reason. The only other thing I would say is that I would change the title. For some reason I have a bad habit of not reading titles before I read the poem, but in this case it served me well because the last line came as more of a surprise and that's why I laughed. Had i read the title I dont think I would of.
Thanks for the read,
Mark
	
	
War and love letter were obviously chosen for a good reason. The only other thing I would say is that I would change the title. For some reason I have a bad habit of not reading titles before I read the poem, but in this case it served me well because the last line came as more of a surprise and that's why I laughed. Had i read the title I dont think I would of.
Thanks for the read,
Mark
 wae aye man ye radgie
 wae aye man ye radgie
 

 
