07-25-2013, 02:26 AM
(07-18-2013, 01:26 AM)rowens Wrote: Were you there yesterday, or was it me, The lack of question marks makes these lines seem like rivers undammed.
standing there in the spring like a row of corn
from a memory of that autumn day
you didn't come to see me on our birthday. This feels cute/creepy/solemn/desperate. A whole lot of things. It's a full statement that says a lot about feeling and less about the meaning of having the same birthday. Cool.
It was a broken ministry,
just your mother, your dad,
eternal undertaker in common Saturday,
and a host of other guests.
You smiled when I walked over,
wearing your black trousers, like me,
instead of your usual black skirts
that mimic your father's profession. A professional tranny?
Handing out samples in a grocery store;
I guess when every girl's dream is to become a succubus, Is it? ouch. I guess my aspirations to become a famous writer should be stashed away.
the legitimate ones have to find legitimate work too.
So was it you? Everyone thought you were my sister, More creepiness here. A comment on supposed incestuousness--
except your parents, of course; and thank goodness for that.
Otherwise I wouldn't have been able to take you home
and let you steal so much of my soul.
Something your boyfriend has never had to offer. Blerg
I'll be there in a minute.

