07-24-2013, 02:35 AM
I enjoyed this, it has the same flavour as One fine day in the middle of the night two dead men got up to fight etc but your rhymes work well and you have some minor issues with the meter ie At the home down game the blind man saw but you have some interesting visuals that I enjoyed and I've done this more than once (To remain sober I kept pouring scotch) great ending. Thanks TOMH
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