first ever poem - friendship

[nopoet62]

Well where to start. I wish the stanza about how you were in distress had more meaning. It should be a stronger point in the poem. Maybe explain how she cared for you. Maybe if you love her so much you should have another stanza telling her so. Grow some balls man

She knows how she cared for me ... she was there...she did it

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I think you would be better off switching "Again we met" with Remember when we crossed the water"

Wow just goes to show a very slight and subtle change and it just read so much better. I've just changed that and like it a lot more

Thank so much ><