Remembrance Day - Please give honest critique, aspiring Poet!

[TheWall0912]

While a few words rhyme nicely, you also have some near rhymes. This isn't a huge deal to me, I do the same thing sometimes, but I have gotten comments about it and suggestions to change it. Overall I like the theme of your poem, war is an interesting things to write about. I would suggest fixing some errors and maybe play with the wording a bit, but nice job!