first ever poem - friendship

first ever poem - friendship

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07-21-2013, 11:58 AM

I'm sure your friend will love it! I have a couple of humble suggestions for better flow and rhyme. Maybe replacing bonding with walking. Also the last stanza feels stilted and disorganized. Try to rework it with the same rhyme scheme as the rest of the poem. Good luck!

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first ever poem - friendship - by nopoet62 - 07-21-2013, 04:58 AM

RE: first ever poem - friendship - by gdimonaco - 07-21-2013, 11:58 AM

RE: first ever poem - friendship - by nopoet62 - 07-22-2013, 03:31 AM

RE: first ever poem - friendship - by rowens - 07-22-2013, 04:09 AM

RE: first ever poem - friendship - by Magpie - 07-22-2013, 04:17 AM

RE: first ever poem - friendship - by nopoet62 - 07-22-2013, 04:28 AM

RE: first ever poem - friendship - by Magpie - 07-22-2013, 07:09 AM

RE: first ever poem - friendship - by R.C. KITCHENS - 07-22-2013, 03:17 PM

RE: first ever poem - friendship - by jdguyb - 07-23-2013, 05:44 AM

RE: first ever poem - friendship - by nopoet62 - 07-23-2013, 05:48 AM

RE: first ever poem - friendship - by nopoet62 - 07-24-2013, 08:42 AM

RE: first ever poem - friendship - by R.C. KITCHENS - 07-24-2013, 02:10 PM

RE: first ever poem - friendship - by nopoet62 - 07-24-2013, 09:56 PM

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