07-21-2013, 09:19 AM
(07-21-2013, 07:08 AM)Bunx Wrote: i don't know about the subject of this poem. i am assuming it is a solider of some type. perhpas vietnam, not sure. If i had a critique i would way this poem is quite board. you should go more in depth with the subject. describe events of war, paint the picture of his gun point thoughts? what does he want to do and why?I took your advice and I added more to the poem. I still feel that I might add more later on, but this draft I conjured up adds more than the previous draft did.