A love so sweet

[fim]

her it goes my second poem

A love so sweet
Magically holding me maybe rethink adverb ... tenderly? gently?
I feel close to her
Tears fill my eyes when I think of her
When I think about her sweet sweet love
Her immaculate arms grasp me immaculate? maybe a better adjective?
The ecstacy is bliss
I close my eyes in utmost love
And it feels as if the cosmos align
Such love cannot be ignored
It is magical
It is pure
And it is true

jdguyb,
A applaud your initiative, and like Volaticus, I encourage you to keep writing your poetry! One of the things I am learning here is that we poets should strive to become masterful word crafters. Word crafters that say more with less. Sometimes metaphor and simile can convey feelings better then a description ... just some ideas. Keep writing (and reading) poetry!
Cheers,
fim