07-20-2013, 07:47 PM
I think that the idea behind the poem is an interesting one. Some of your lines I love, like 'for sometimes life is [a] contest/ to see who can lie the best'.
Some of the ideas could be a little more subtle, for example 'such as rumours spread by gossip'. Maybe use imagery and metaphors instead?
With some more work, this will be a great poem!
Some of the ideas could be a little more subtle, for example 'such as rumours spread by gossip'. Maybe use imagery and metaphors instead?
With some more work, this will be a great poem!