in a cloak of fallen leaves

[rayheinrich]

Just staring out on the road to learning haiku & senyru
Heart particularly enjoyed your senryu train starter.
Ray your offering is one that can be read over with pleasure many times.

Not sure what the rules of a senyru train are (could you explain if there are any, sounds interesting)

meanwhile an attempted offering from me:

Passing equinox
A ripening barley crop
A new hair cut

I like that. Especially the crisp connection of hair cut and harvesting barley.

I didn't know what a senryu train was either. Heartafire knows but
she's not back yet so I looked around. Evidently the next person
takes the last line of the previous senryu and uses it for the first
line of theirs. Here are three stolen from some where:

life, death and rebirth
earth; a temporary home
peaceful home not known

peaceful home not known
so look inside, look inside
the page is still now

the page is still now
gathered dust in centrefold
crisis rests in peace

etc. etc. etc.


Heartafire had suggested that it alternate senryu - haiku - senryu etc.
but, pending her approval, I think people should write whichever
they want to (it's hard to tell the difference most of the time anyway).

The other thing I'd change is that instead of repeating the last line
as the first, we need to use two big words of our choosing from the
previous poem. (I.e. Using 'the', 'is', 'in', 'a', etc., is frowned upon;
but, is up to the individual.) I like the extra freedom this would give, but
think, since the poems are so small, that using two words would
still provide a satisfying connection. Also anyone who wanted to
could keep a bit of the theme from the last one to increase the
connection of meaning. Again, totally optional, but people who
did it would get a few non-existent 'cool' points when they
succeeded.

But enough jabber...
Rules:
1. Use 2 major words from the poem before.

2. Echo a bit of the subject from the last one IF you want to.

3. Use a TINY 2 to 4 line poem which can be haiku or senryu or
whatever you damn please (the two and four line are for anyone
who wants to go crazy and put in a bit of rhyme).

4. If two people get crossed up since they're posting at the same time,
the next person should choose one of them and go from there.


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Passing equinox
A ripening barley crop
A new hair cut

equinox
our hippie earth mother
growing her hair long again