07-19-2013, 01:53 PM
(07-19-2013, 07:18 AM)Brownlie Wrote: This poem is a tough gig I always end up contorting words to fit structure and then sometimes I abandon structure altogether in frustration. The second refrain seems to go well if you can use some sort of enjambment with it.not sure there's any better advice than leanne gave.
i think you answered your own question when you said "I always end up contorting words to fit" i tend to do the same with most of the poetry forms i try. i think the idea is to keep at it and listen to feedback.
one of my failings is missing a half foot in the last line of a poem
the bad thing is i see it but for some reason i don't change it. back to the contorting; all you can do is try not to do it. one of the ways i do something like a vill is to get it on the screen; all the lines, then swap and change them, basically do an in depth edit or 5, before i post it. another point i would make is that you don't lose heart. just try your best. i've seen how you edit and i really think you should be proud. it isn't about being that great poet, it's about improving your craft. stick with it
