07-18-2013, 10:41 PM
(07-17-2013, 12:40 PM)carassiusauratus Wrote: I believe that in this country, many of our liberties have been blatantly violated. Not everyone has had the opportunity to realize this, because much of it is secret. I suppose one solution is to protest, but what happens when they move to detain us? Hence, my violent solution.You've just let me know something about your motivation for writing the poem. Are there any of these feelings surfacing in your poem? If not, you can bring in a few lines:
I have an angry soul, I suppose. What would you suggest for putting my own soul into it? I'm curious.
Thanks for the thoughts!
They have taken my very soul
with their secret machinery.
Or
My love life has become an open-book
for trolls behind cookie cutter desks.
These are shitty examples but you get the point.

