I Dressed In White
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(07-17-2013, 02:21 AM)TheWall0912 Wrote:  Nerves engulfed me from head to toe
I had doubts but you'd never know
Freshly picked flowers were clutched in my hand
Repeatedly telling myself you were the right man

My dad held my arm to give me away
He knew his little girl could no longer stay
The look when you saw me was pure admiration
As I walked down the aisle with anticipation

In your tuxedo you stood tall and proud
Smiling as "The Wedding March" played out loud
The rings were out -
We exchanged vows- I feel like this and the above line may throw off rythem and or ryhme scheme especially the second line.
I said "I do."
And so did you
Really sweet poem, I hope it was about your first hand experience it sounds like lovely day. As for those two lines every time I read it the non rhyme threw me off, but maybe that's just me. Thanks for the read!


Messages In This Thread
I Dressed In White - by TheWall0912 - 07-17-2013, 02:21 AM
RE: I Dressed In White - by Heartafire - 07-17-2013, 02:45 AM
RE: I Dressed In White - by FayandFire - 07-18-2013, 07:55 AM
RE: I Dressed In White - by TheWall0912 - 07-18-2013, 11:36 PM



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