Generic Relationships

[billy]

i think it's prose like for the most part but an enjoyable to read.
i have very little constructive feedback to give because if it were altered too much it would lose it's coldness in the last stanza.

thanks for the read.

Were you there yesterday, or was it me,
standing there in the spring like a row of corn
from a memory of that autumn day
you didn't come to see me on our birthday.i think i get what you're saying but the wording make me stop too long in order to work it out.

It was a broken ministry,
just your mother, your dad,
eternal undertaker in common Saturday, is Saturday a place?
and a host of other guests. i'm not sure [a host], does [just] in the 2nd line of this stanza any good

You smiled when I walked over,
wearing your black trousers, like me,
instead of your usual black skirts
that mimic your father's profession.

Handing out samples in a grocery store;
I guess when every girl's dream is to become a succubus,
the legitimate ones have to find legitimate work too.
So was it you? Everyone thought you were my sister,

except your parents, of course; and thank goodness for that.
Otherwise I wouldn't have been able to take you home
and let you steal so much of my soul.
Something your boyfriend has never had to offer.