07-17-2013, 09:59 AM
I just got my cherry popped. This is the first homosexual poem I've read, male or female. This is very erotic, to be sure. A general critique here. This speaks very much as an act that is happening, but there is much of it and no real hint at where you are on the inside. What is the motivation in the act. Don't give it away, of course. But there must be something underneath the physical desire.