"Broken" a poem-very rough draft

[R.C. KITCHENS]

Hey brutally honest input wanted, aside from spelling etc, thank you so much.

"Broken"

My mind is pacing, heart racing, . is it skipping beats? I've lost count to daydreaming, lost time to scheming, some may say a soul without a meaning.
The conflict here is that you've lost count to daydreaming and lost time to scheming. Daydreaming is different than scheming. I get that, but
what I dont understand is why you went from one to the other. Maybe a more detailed examination will reveal it to you where you could include it in your effort. Also, some line of imagery would be nice to answer the question why the mind is pacing and the heart is racing.Did you just work out? get in a fight? run a mile? do you have anxiety issues? "Soul without meaning" is cliche.


anticipation... our creation: an alternate universe, but baby don't you know that you're my curse?

It is better to show "anticipation" than to tell it. the following line I really don't understand. "Our creation: an alternate universe, but baby don't you know that your my curse?" There is something missing here. I don't know what to gather from it except our creation is an alternate universe and that is vague to say the least.

but lets rehears, rehearse

you play your part n' ill play mine, breath in breath out and I know that you're mine. you're my addiction.

Again, very vague. What part are you implying?

we can buy a little time, attraction or distraction? what you need, not wantwhat you want, take your time baby, it's priceless.

more imagery here, also, "We can buy a little time" seems cliche to me.

livin a lie baby, I can tell that you're lonely.

how can you tell that he is lonely? You should use imagery to express it.

I'll let you in, you cant take whats been given, It's you, you I want. So simple I don't ask for much, the way you make me feel I need to be a part of you.

So lay me down to rest , with my head aponupon your chest, tell me what I want to hear, please don't break my heart, dont tell me what I fear

I barely know you but you know me, I'm your addiction.

This is a rough draft. You got something that you can build on and express better. I think you could benefit by reading more poetry on the site and get a feel of imagery and how they show something like "anticipation" versus just telling "anticipation" to the reader.
I think your trying to convey something, but, at this time is hard
to understand from a reader point of view.
I also think if you knew certain spelling mistakes before posting, that you shouldve fixed them first before posting in Mild critique.
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