07-13-2013, 01:45 AM
Hi Browlie, thanks for all the work you put into those comments they are helpful and illuminating for further work on this one.Between you doing your crit I have already posted a thrid edit but i will be looking over the things you mention when i undoubtedly go through it again. Thank you.
@tec I decided it was "in a moonbeam" She is cream complexioned and when seen in the light of a moombeam she apears translucent. No doubt you will now tell me why I am wrong.
@tec I decided it was "in a moonbeam" She is cream complexioned and when seen in the light of a moombeam she apears translucent. No doubt you will now tell me why I am wrong.