From blossom to bottle (Edit 2)

[tectak]

Thanks for the feedback Tec. I'm not normally reduced to tears when i'm reading a crit but your thoughts and comments on cream and golden load had me howling with laughter.
As ever i sometimes think you are just being obtuse as to a line meaning just for the sake of it and other times you are so sharp I'm concerned about you cutting yourself.

As to the Lacto porn I had no idea such things existed (I'll need to look it up) Although, as i recently spent many tedious hours this last week rapeing the hedges on the farm to get the bushes to release thier big floppy heads into my bag, I have to confess that I had an image of Uncle Buck in the washing machine scetch.
I will revisit the points you have made and try again. i wrote this with a very specific person and understory in mind and perhaps i did loose the thread of my cover metaphore in the process. I really want to get this one nailed as otherwise i have written a poor tribute for someone that i intended to honour with my best efforts.
Once again much thanks for all the work you put into the crits you give. Appreciation for your time and respect for your skill.
AJ.

Hi cider,
I made up lacto-porn. Hyphens are just so convincingly un-veracious!
On a side note. If you want to laud someone, keep it simple, keep it memorable and keep it un-competitive. There's nothing worse than people saying nice things about you in a better way than you can say nice things about them!Best,
tectak