07-10-2013, 10:37 AM
not sure the third stanza does you any good and the last is a little cheesy, but i enjoyed it. the last verse though a bit cheesy was clever in it's cheese
it's an open poem that's easy to understand, the rhymes are okay and it tells a story, not a bad effort.
it's an open poem that's easy to understand, the rhymes are okay and it tells a story, not a bad effort. (07-09-2013, 10:46 AM)gdimonaco Wrote: For Elizabeth H.
Lost to me for decades,
On Facebook you were found,
Married and a world away,
Memories abound.
The Yankees won in ’96,
You were there by me,
Softly stolen sofa kiss,
Pool games, beer, green tea.
It seemed that we would be as one,
Alas it was not so,
Your walls could never let me in,
I sadly had to go.
But to click or not to click?,
The conflict would not end,
I’d never have you as a lover,
Could I add you as a friend?
