Adam's Choice edit 1

[billy]

it's almost there, i'm enjoying reading your forms, though it seems to have a lot of rhyme problems, they're really nits that could be put right very quickly, but the rhymes and refrains are what make the villanelle work...as well as the meter which other can comment on as it seem okay to me apart from the 3rd line (2nd refrain) has an extra half foot

good effort

Shall I go eat this apple hanging here? a get around would be to change here to there as both are sort of half rhymes with seer
The adders whisper out for me to eat.
What knowledge hangs, will I become a seer? a suggest would be to change become to [be]

Its vibrant reddish hue a tempting sweet. shouldn't sweet rhyme with here
The snake is wisdom hissing sweeps through leaves. again there's a rhyme problem. that said i like the line itself. though knowledge which the tree was of is different than wisdom
Shall I go eat this apple hanging here?

The children play in gardens. Father’s with fear
are overbearing weights with rules decreed. shouldn't decreed rhyme with eat?
What knowledge hangs, will I become a seer? i like the use of hangs, it's very Damoclesian in that it's hung by a metaphorical thread or hair as was the sword above the head of Damocles.

What sounds beyond the garden I can’t hear
are ripe in tempting apples. Shall I cheat?
Shall I go eat this apple hanging here?

Is Satan thinking he beguiled Eve
by adding blush to her now vibrant cheeks?
What knowledge hangs, will I become a seer?

Forbidden fruit so sweet with truth so near
that hangs as red as bloody life, a feast.
Shall I go eat this apple hanging here?
What knowledge hangs, will I become a seer?