07-10-2013, 06:42 AM
Hi Bunx,
Sorry if i'm a bit slow on the uptake here. Is this actually a song lyric you have posted (and if so have you set it to music).
As a poem i got a bit lost a couple of the lines (but that could just be me).
I loved all of the second stanza. Then "Even crabs have makes" ...confused me (was it mates or am I just out of the loop).
This felt like a fun read I particularly like the play on words :Brother move to and flow to the sounds of the bass below. And: cleanse my sense of right and rock,. Nicely done.
Sorry if i'm a bit slow on the uptake here. Is this actually a song lyric you have posted (and if so have you set it to music).
As a poem i got a bit lost a couple of the lines (but that could just be me).
I loved all of the second stanza. Then "Even crabs have makes" ...confused me (was it mates or am I just out of the loop).
This felt like a fun read I particularly like the play on words :Brother move to and flow to the sounds of the bass below. And: cleanse my sense of right and rock,. Nicely done.