Sated

[Todd]

Hi EmilyJune,

I like a lot of this. My comments below:

She does kegels for him.--Nice opening, suggestive and great word choice
Three daily sets of ten,
while she’s behind the desk at school or work,--I think with the rhythm you've set "at school or work" feels like it can be cut for the shorter line. It throws the rhythm slightly, and the detail doesn't add much. If you go that way probably a comma after desk and after traffic in the next line
in traffic or brushing her teeth.

They smoke and eat pizza in bed,
kissing with greasy tongues.--Nice detail
They come with her on top,
pulled tight into his chest.
Appetites earned, they wake to growling bellies.--I don't think you need appetites earned
“What’s for dinner?” he asks. --Again don't know if you need this line. You can move right into the action and observation
She worries about her waist,
but relents when he mentions burgers and shakes.
At midnight, she’ll fry potato--feels like this should be plural rather than singular
with onion and garlic and parsley.

She never gave in easy.
She never watched sports or apologized.--One optional possible interesting line break...maybe break after watched
She tolerates things she never did.
Not the porn or reckless driving,
but the faucet left to run,
his tardiness and flirtatiousness.--love the sense of the relationship throughout this

She never felt sexy.
She never cried over a man before,
never felt an ache crawl from her chest--Nice personification of the ache. You may be able to play with the image more but it works
to her throat and stomach.
She was never sated.
But with the buttered French toast
and his grip on her thigh,
she is voracious, sexy in her gluttony.--I like the wrap up.

Enjoyable read. I hope some of the comments will be helpful.

Best,

Todd