Novice Jive
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(07-08-2013, 03:41 AM)Bunx Wrote:  EDIT 1
What? You ask is the meaning of jive.
This line above reads awkwardly. maybe "You ask what the meaning of jive is. It is hog wash, moshing and staying alive.
Hog wash, moshing and, staying alive?

What? You ask is the novice jive?
Sexy Jesus, getting all rukus on a herd
of rock and roll chickens? Bak?
I don't believe "ruckus" is used properly here.
Also a misspelling.

What you ask is the meaning of love?
Love is a rukus Jive, reflecting beauty
from the sky above.

Gals, soaring above the rest. Taking
bread from duck is their sole test.
Camping in the pond filled park,
I'd say you could just use "camping in the pond"
where the baby
geese like to honk the tonk. The ducks
waddle the butt shaking walk.

Gals squawk in the eyes of the geese, but the
mama geese said, "hey, gal get away, I'm a ucking geese."
uckling?
Jeeze, the gal thought. Time to swamp the three children
holding grain. Here the children wait for the rain.
Plain and simply running though the softly rippling you dont need softly
puddles I glide though on my bike. Twenty to third
my average, eh tike. don't understand this, "twenty to third my average"

Water is for everyone geese,
I'd probably say "Geese, water is for everyone"
or not. Seagulls even"even" isn't needed
share that water, before they meet the hungry bread stare.
doesn't make sense. "before they meet the hungry bird stare"
seems like there should be something before it.

Ducks keep waddling. Geese keep honking.

Well, I'll keep jiving.
Really interesting. But, very hard to get what your trying to say entirely.
I once told this blond chick to screw in a light bulb..

She got naked and asked "how do I get in it?"
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Messages In This Thread
Novice Jive - by Bunx - 07-08-2013, 03:41 AM
RE: Novice Jive - by Volaticus - 07-08-2013, 09:01 AM
RE: Novice Jive - by Bunx - 07-08-2013, 11:18 AM
RE: Novice Jive - by Volaticus - 07-08-2013, 11:46 AM
RE: Novice Jive - by R.C. KITCHENS - 07-08-2013, 02:24 PM
RE: Novice Jive - by Bunx - 07-09-2013, 12:07 AM



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