The Plan I & The Plan II

[milo]

Djames,
Thank you for the kind words. I'm glad you enjoyed the composition. And to everyone else, I obviously know how to rhyme. Have you ever thought of a writing exercise other than writing plain, uninspired rhymes just for the sake of rhyming? Have you ever tried to make a poem flow throughout without rhyming at all? Trust me, it is very challenging! However, I choose to do so occasionally, because it breaks up the monotony of "bullshit poetry." And on another note, the so-called "Poetry experts" who criticize my work may know a great deal about poetry, however, from I have read of their work, they have no idea whatsoever how to write with actual substance ... But then again, different strokes for different folks.

Take care everyone,
Robbie Reaper

Maybe I don't know anything, but I always liked poetry because it's kind of without rules. That's what I liked about this, it gives me the vibe you wrote this from the heart.

I thought your word choice made sense... It was unique in the way it depicts what you're trying to get across and how... for me, sometimes the beauty of language is to bend the rules.

I also like how it has a little theme goin' on there. What I mean by that is, it's like an episode of someone's life. An issue that needed to be dealt with, and over time the plan changed.

Two things I wasn't too crazy about..
"Reckless abandon for affliction" though kind of came off as a little cliche or unoriginal to me.
The rhythm is hard to pick up on, even though you seemed to have one going on there with the way the lines break.

Like I said, I'm really no poetry master, but when you take it for what it is, I think it's creative and I like the passion that it possesses.

This writing with actual substance, that is what my writing has been missing. Thank god a poetic genius showed up with this masterpiece and set me straight. Writing with rhythm but no rhyme? Impossible for us lesser poets but a genius like you makes it look easy.

This poem?

It has flow.

It resonated with me.