07-08-2013, 11:35 AM
Hi TOMH,
I enjoyed reading this. I didn't expect the last stanza; I really like the sort of irony of it.
Not really any crit to offer, other than a small nit. The first two lines felt a bit disconnected, and I wanted to read "an email" or "in an email" or something like that, to bind the lines more together, like they are in the rest of the poem.
JMHO of course.
Best,
LB
I enjoyed reading this. I didn't expect the last stanza; I really like the sort of irony of it.
Not really any crit to offer, other than a small nit. The first two lines felt a bit disconnected, and I wanted to read "an email" or "in an email" or something like that, to bind the lines more together, like they are in the rest of the poem.
JMHO of course.
Best,
LB