07-06-2013, 07:12 AM
Hi there. I enjoyed the tone and the humour throughout, especially the first stanza which sets the narrator up nicely. Even rhyming tune and spoon is done in a light way, so it doesn't sound cheesy as it might have.
I tend to think that the last lines -- from "Julia" -- don't really fit. They seem like another poem entirely.
I tend to think that the last lines -- from "Julia" -- don't really fit. They seem like another poem entirely.
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