Biding time

[tectak]

2nd Edit.

Biding time

Sellotaped into your shape;
your sticky life masking rape
of every breath and hope.
You suffocate me with layered opinions,
rye bread sandwiches of laminated stiffness.

In less harsh climes an unformed mind can climb and reach
the rarefied summits of free-formed thought;
but your rigid designs,
with inbuilt anti-organic inhibitors,
seal and lock out
any breath of originality - not invented on this roll.

I am that air bubble that will not burst.
I am the crease beneath your nail that will not slide out.
Try as you might to eradicate me – I’ll just smile and wait
for a warm wind to expand my territory and for your viscid,
clingy covering to grow brittle with age.

Then I will crack your shiny surface,
into which air and water and bread crumbs
will creep and undermine your synthetic sheets
with viral non-conforming thoughts.
And you will be soft like grape must beneath my feet.




1st edit

Biding time.

Sellotaped into your shape; your sticky, life
masking rape of every breath and hope.
You suffocate me with layered opinions,
rye bread sandwiches of laminated stiffness.
In less harsh climes an unformed mind can climb
and reach the rarefied summits of free-formed thought,
but your pre-formed designs, with inbuilt anti-organic
growth inhibitors, seal and lock out any unbidden
breath of originality not invented on this roll.

I am that air bubble that will not burst.
I am the crease beneath your nail that will not slide out.
Try as you might to eradicate me – I’ll just smile and wait
for a warm wind to expand my territory and for your sticky,
clingy form to grow brittle with age.
Then I will crack your shiny surface, into which air and water
and bread crumbs will creep and undermine your synthetic sheets
with viral non-conforming thoughts.
And you will be soft like grape must beneath my feet.


Original post.
Biding time.

Sellotaped into your shape; your sticky, life
masking rape of every breath and hope.
You suffocate me with layered opinions,
rye bread sandwiches of laminated stiffness.
In less harsh climes an unformed mind can climb
and reach the rarefied summits of free-formed thought,
but your pre-formed designs, with inbuilt anti-organic
growth inhibitors, seal and lock out any unbidden
breath of originality not invented on this roll.

I am that air bubble that will not burst.
I am the crease beneath your nail that will not slide out.
Try as you might to eradicate me – I’ll just smile and wait
for a warm wind to expand my territory and for your sticky,
clingy form to grow brittle with age.
Then I will crack your shiny surface, into which air and water
and nutrients will creep and undermine your synthetic sheets
with viral non-conforming thoughts.
And you will be soft like putty beneath my feet.

---

2nd Edit.

Biding time

Sellotaped into your shape;
your sticky life masking rape
of every breath and hope.
You suffocate me with layered opinions,
rye bread sandwiches of laminated stiffness.

In less harsh climes an unformed mind can climb and reach
the rarefied summits of free-formed thought;
but your rigid designs,
with inbuilt anti-organic inhibitors,
seal and lock out
any breath of originality - not invented on this roll.

I am that air bubble that will not burst.
I am the crease beneath your nail that will not slide out.
Try as you might to eradicate me – I’ll just smile and wait
for a warm wind to expand my territory and for your viscid,
clingy covering to grow brittle with age.

Then I will crack your shiny surface,
into which air and water and bread crumbs
will creep and undermine your synthetic sheets
with viral non-conforming thoughts.
And you will be soft like grape must beneath my feet.




1st edit

Biding time.

Sellotaped into your shape; your sticky, life
masking rape of every breath and hope.
You suffocate me with layered opinions,
rye bread sandwiches of laminated stiffness.
In less harsh climes an unformed mind can climb
and reach the rarefied summits of free-formed thought,
but your pre-formed designs, with inbuilt anti-organic
growth inhibitors, seal and lock out any unbidden
breath of originality not invented on this roll.

I am that air bubble that will not burst.
I am the crease beneath your nail that will not slide out.
Try as you might to eradicate me – I’ll just smile and wait
for a warm wind to expand my territory and for your sticky,
clingy form to grow brittle with age.
Then I will crack your shiny surface, into which air and water
and bread crumbs will creep and undermine your synthetic sheets
with viral non-conforming thoughts.
And you will be soft like grape must beneath my feet.


Original post.
Biding time.

Sellotaped into your shape; your sticky, life
masking rape of every breath and hope.
You suffocate me with layered opinions,
rye bread sandwiches of laminated stiffness.
In less harsh climes an unformed mind can climb
and reach the rarefied summits of free-formed thought,
but your pre-formed designs, with inbuilt anti-organic
growth inhibitors, seal and lock out any unbidden
breath of originality not invented on this roll.

I am that air bubble that will not burst.
I am the crease beneath your nail that will not slide out.
Try as you might to eradicate me – I’ll just smile and wait
for a warm wind to expand my territory and for your sticky,
clingy form to grow brittle with age.
Then I will crack your shiny surface, into which air and water
and nutrients will creep and undermine your synthetic sheets
with viral non-conforming thoughts.
And you will be soft like putty beneath my feet.

Twice serge on second edit. Love this to bits...and do not say well, you would, wouldn't you. Billy said it first, it is good that you resist some critique but not all critique.
A fine piece.
Best,
tectak