A Passing

[tectak]

Small nits,billy, but consequential. Overall a well transmitted message difficult to misread....nothing wrong with that.
Best,
tectak
It carried scent of ferns, unfurled a smell Unrelated "it" could be changed to simply "Wind" but better to avoid the unpoetic and sanitary "smell". Try " Wind carried waft of ferns, unfurled a scent ..." Your poem.
of loose barked silver birch and stretching oaks.
Then dallied by the poplar's narrow strokes
and wooed a hermit thrush that trilled along
on branch; its spotted breast so proud in song.
The parted bluebells swayed, within the glade
as chorused foxglove sang aloud in shade,
the mottled woodland wrapped me in its spell. ...but from the heart. Good

The years, like winds of old have bled away Mauled metaphor. Do winds bleed? " The years have gone, on breezes blown away.." Again, your poem. Ignore me. I am a distant muse past my tell by date
and with them flew the softness of the trees.
now terracotta houses rise like sails. Capital on "Now" if you mean it but no comma after "sails"
and sewerage pipes are threaded through the brae. Moot point coming. I read your note. Some may argue but you are strictly speaking correct in using "sew er age" when before "pipes" but common parlance by anti-pedants would allow "sewage" . Your call.
No more the wooded hills, no more the breeze. I don't see why the breeze has gone but it should....no more the trees maybe
No more summer's dell, no more the vales.

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i pronounce sewerage as sew ridge