07-05-2013, 03:50 AM
@ Tec - How is your holiday working out?
Here's hoping the local shampoo agrees with you and suitably mellowed you might like my edits.
Must admit I am struggling with this. I don't like untidy lines and desperatly wanted to get away from sad end rhymes (hence unable to relinquish rhyming, I had hidden them internally (...probably the cause of my odd line ending) ...now the first two lines are causing me a lot of stress.
Also not entirly sure about my "sticky" alternative. Will see what comments come back.
Meanwhile enjoy chillin. "More Poo darling?"
Here's hoping the local shampoo agrees with you and suitably mellowed you might like my edits.
Must admit I am struggling with this. I don't like untidy lines and desperatly wanted to get away from sad end rhymes (hence unable to relinquish rhyming, I had hidden them internally (...probably the cause of my odd line ending) ...now the first two lines are causing me a lot of stress.
Also not entirly sure about my "sticky" alternative. Will see what comments come back.
Meanwhile enjoy chillin. "More Poo darling?"