07-01-2013, 10:49 PM
Hi there, I enjoyed reading this. I found it a bit abstract, but it clearly brought to mind our ongoing case here in Florida, The State of Florida vs
Zimmerman. Zimmerman being the white man who shot a young black man,
Travon Martin supposedly in self defense. I could read about this tragedy in these lines. I think you could do a better job of clarifying what you are actually trying to get across and perhaps lend some poetic devices to this to make it easier on the eyes and ears. Thank you for sharing this.
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Zimmerman. Zimmerman being the white man who shot a young black man,
Travon Martin supposedly in self defense. I could read about this tragedy in these lines. I think you could do a better job of clarifying what you are actually trying to get across and perhaps lend some poetic devices to this to make it easier on the eyes and ears. Thank you for sharing this.
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