06-30-2013, 11:06 PM
I have read your poem and the reply you gave to Rowens and from my read you seem to have written three sets of couplets that could now be expanded into three stanzas.
As you (rightly) mention yourself that "there is probably not much in them for anyone but myself" ...how about reworking these lines to give your readers some images and insight into what prompted these thoughts.
My suggestion would be if you want to write a poem for someone other than yourself, perhaps you could use these couplets as questions to yourself. Such as :why do my tears feel tired and useless and wasted...and why have they gone on for so long? Then turn this question into some metaphores and images that others can visulise.
Hope this is of some help
All the best AJ.
As you (rightly) mention yourself that "there is probably not much in them for anyone but myself" ...how about reworking these lines to give your readers some images and insight into what prompted these thoughts.
My suggestion would be if you want to write a poem for someone other than yourself, perhaps you could use these couplets as questions to yourself. Such as :why do my tears feel tired and useless and wasted...and why have they gone on for so long? Then turn this question into some metaphores and images that others can visulise.
Hope this is of some help
All the best AJ.