06-30-2013, 10:57 PM
Hi whilst this had much to be appreciated in terms of internal rhymes and overall smoothness of the read, it left me a bit cold in respect of images that i could relate to in that you told me a story but did not offer me many pictures or images with which i could use my imagination to get into the picture. it feels like it is told with no hidden suggestions or wriggle room in the interpretation and as such felt just two dimentional.
I won't re-state the same comments as Billy about gramma errors and spoilers that he mentions, but I would encourage you to try the workshopping aspects of recieving feedback. If you are serious(as you mentioned) about developing your skills, I can recommend no better place to be than in one of the workshopping threads on this site.
All the best AJ.
I won't re-state the same comments as Billy about gramma errors and spoilers that he mentions, but I would encourage you to try the workshopping aspects of recieving feedback. If you are serious(as you mentioned) about developing your skills, I can recommend no better place to be than in one of the workshopping threads on this site.
All the best AJ.