Rewrite of Road Kill Much Shorter

[tectak]

I have a feeling I'm really going to get it with this one Not sure if herbaceous works here.
You said it
Road-Kill

When I am driving rural roads, the dust Drop the padding out the window ."When I.." is unnecessary. Like once upon a time.
Will cloud around windows, as gravel creaks Capitalising every damn line is now becoming a little deliberate. I am already irritable because you are about to torture my beloved language (again). See next line.
Beneath, the wheels that hold a heavy force. If you do not understand the use of punctuation post your work in the mild forum, go away and read some books, say War and Peace, Ulysses then memorise the Koran. No comma after "beneath"
Herbaceous eating quadrupeds will die. Yes. Agreed. Awful line. SO WHY USE
IT? Triffid eats hamster.
When driving long enough, a man will come Enough? A mile? A light-year? ....or just until he comes a cross a wealth ( Which, by the way, is the wrong word, a cliche and paired with "a cross" , which is a crucifix, instead of across, makes you this weeks prize-winner in the Dilettante of the Year monthly contest held fortnightly every decade.)
Across a wealth of dead and flatly laid
Road-Kill. It’s spring, and roads are rife
With fragile rabbits symbolizing life.
The brake-pads of my car are wearing out
From halting stops, but even brakes don’t cease You CANNOT cease a NOUN!
Inevitable death. The cracking spines
That signal unexpected ends on roads. Debatably which, not that. Milo? Can you be bothered.

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tectak