Play the violin again edit 2. leanne,serge.edit 1 milo,svan,rc,billy, serge et al

[serge gurkski]

leanne wrote:
"Your tender notes will soothe the strings; -- with the t on the previous line, this is a touch too tinny -- if the previous t were replaced, the softer nd would predominate and slide into the sibilants more smoothly"

but I have a different problem with that line my friend wrote here :
I agree that the line is tinny because of what it means.
Tom, it is not a good line (meaning-wise)
You are a good poet but not here.
You are not as shallow as this line.

cheers

serge (almost drunk)