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06-26-2013, 04:41 AM
(06-26-2013, 04:37 AM)rowens Wrote: It's stiff sounding. The lines can be smoothed out, and some of the punctuation considered.Thank you for the feedback! What do you mean by stiff sounding? And by smoothed out do you mean some words can be taken out, or to change the lines and sentences so it flows better? |
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Everything - by Smudge173 - 06-26-2013, 03:58 AM
RE: Everything - by rowens - 06-26-2013, 04:37 AM
RE: Everything - by Smudge173 - 06-26-2013, 04:41 AM
RE: Everything - by rowens - 06-26-2013, 04:44 AM
RE: Everything - by Smudge173 - 06-26-2013, 05:33 AM
RE: Everything - by milo - 06-26-2013, 07:08 AM
RE: Everything - by R.C. KITCHENS - 06-26-2013, 11:01 AM
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