06-26-2013, 03:58 AM
Hello, this is my first attempt at a poem. Thought I'd take a stab at it, bit shabby but ah well.
I've called it Everything because it's a bit of everything. I do welcome any type of feedback and please be brutally honest!
Here it is:
"Everything that's around you is subject to change,
It's something I've learnt in this day and age,
But you've gotta take control and create the next page,
All that seems to matter is the sum of your wage.
With every opportunity there's a little to miss,
These past few years I've compiled a list:
Friends, family and the unknown of the mist,
I can be profound but I hope you get the jist.
4 walls, a floor, a door and a ceiling,
This is where I show how I'm really feeling,
When it's too much the outer layer starts peeling,
If you wanna help, be prepared for some heaving.
This society needs a bit of a fix,
There's young girls who aspire to be sticks.
A tummy tuck, boob job, maybe a face lift
None of that, be happy with what you were faced with."
Thanks for checking it out.
I've called it Everything because it's a bit of everything. I do welcome any type of feedback and please be brutally honest!
Here it is:
"Everything that's around you is subject to change,
It's something I've learnt in this day and age,
But you've gotta take control and create the next page,
All that seems to matter is the sum of your wage.
With every opportunity there's a little to miss,
These past few years I've compiled a list:
Friends, family and the unknown of the mist,
I can be profound but I hope you get the jist.
4 walls, a floor, a door and a ceiling,
This is where I show how I'm really feeling,
When it's too much the outer layer starts peeling,
If you wanna help, be prepared for some heaving.
This society needs a bit of a fix,
There's young girls who aspire to be sticks.
A tummy tuck, boob job, maybe a face lift
None of that, be happy with what you were faced with."
Thanks for checking it out.