Night's Sleep

[R.C. KITCHENS]

His soft golden hair soaked slightly in a sleeper's sweat.
Caresses my cold shoulder as we are dimmed by artificial light.
I dont get how he could be in a sweat and you have a cold shoulder, must be a big difference in blood thickness. I dont really like "dimmed by artificial light" feel like there is something better fitting.
His broad silhouette is hidden by black blankets, engulfing his form, distorting it from view. I think there is too much emphasis on him being covered up. I think you could go with just" hidden by black blankets and get the point across.
He hunches his shoulders slowly while his is stirred from his slumber softly.dont think softly is needed
A part of tousled hair hangs across his flushed cheek.
His flushed cheek.dont see the need for "his flushed cheek" to be stated again.
Painted by night's sleep.

Its proper etiquette to give critique first before posting your own poetry.
I think you could convey a little more with less words and repetition of some description. I like the little bit of imagery but feel like the poem itself is lacking any intent or purposeful direction. Its mainly like a description of sorts. Good luck with the piece.