Death on our Roads

[wystan1000]

I think you are bang on in this. Basically the poem is hard enough to understand to not really take much extra vagueness and confusion (the Moloch truck, the problems with the ending) The only thing I would defend is the beginning.

"People make it all the time" people make the threat all the time. It's real.

thanks so much. A lot to work with.

Michael

Yeah Man, I got what you were saying it just took a good read to get certain parts of it in its entirety. It seems like it'd be better spoken versus being read. Some work and it will be better.

Thanks - I'm told that not all poetry is immediately understandable on first read through (!) But that's no reason not to clarify the bits that are overcomplicated.

Michael

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New edit. Thanks everyone. This is hardly the most profound poem in the world. All the more reason for it to be easier to understand.