War Memorials Edit 3 (Billy, Milo, and Tectack)
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War Memorials Edit 3 (Billy, Milo, and Tectack)
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06-18-2013, 01:55 AM
(06-15-2013, 10:58 AM)milo Wrote: the meter is better, you are missing a rhyme for "igms as", "rome" and heroes". Also, the double "so" intro lines are reading a wee bit padded methinks . . .Got rid of the repeated "so" and improved the rhyme. I think I may be learning something. Thank you for your help. I'm sure the poem is still not complete. |
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War Memorials Edit 3 (Billy, Milo, and Tectack) - by Brownlie - 06-11-2013, 02:09 AM
RE: War Memorials - by tectak - 06-11-2013, 04:00 AM
RE: War Memorials - by Brownlie - 06-11-2013, 04:18 AM
RE: War Memorials - by tectak - 06-11-2013, 05:06 AM
RE: War Memorials - by milo - 06-11-2013, 06:27 AM
RE: War Memorials - by tectak - 06-11-2013, 07:12 AM
RE: War Memorials - by Brownlie - 06-11-2013, 07:56 AM
RE: War Memorials - by milo - 06-11-2013, 09:18 PM
RE: War Memorials - by Brownlie - 06-12-2013, 12:56 AM
RE: War Memorials - by milo - 06-12-2013, 06:48 AM
RE: War Memorials - by Brownlie - 06-13-2013, 02:32 AM
RE: War Memorials - by Bunx - 06-12-2013, 01:36 AM
RE: War Memorials Edit (Milo, and Tectack) - by milo - 06-13-2013, 07:33 AM
RE: War Memorials Edit (Milo, and Tectack) - by Brownlie - 06-13-2013, 09:00 AM
RE: War Memorials Edit (Milo, and Tectack) - by billy - 06-13-2013, 10:29 AM
RE: War Memorials Edit (Milo, and Tectack) - by Brownlie - 06-14-2013, 11:35 PM
RE: War Memorials Edit 2 (Billy, Milo, and Tectack) - by milo - 06-15-2013, 10:58 AM
RE: War Memorials Edit 2 (Billy, Milo, and Tectack) - by Brownlie - 06-18-2013, 01:55 AM
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