Limbo

[billy]

lots of intangibles, what does phrases like;
An ultimatum on the track
and
Words are vacant, vast and pale
try and not mix the meanings of what's being stated.
gives us something solid, use an image or two.

Sieves through which our feelings drain

is a great line. it works

so does;

Maps around my head are muddled

but they don't sit well within the poem which in the main says very very little too many times.

Above the earth, beneath the sky,
Lost within my imperfection
Searching through the compasses
Trying to define direction
Maps around my head are muddled
All without a destination
Staring at them, losing focus
Craving my determination
I've held a purpose in my past
I've let a purpose hold me back
All lead to this same precipice
An ultimatum on the track
Words are vacant, vast and pale
Sieves through which our feelings drain
Praying to be caught somewhere
In silence that has shared the pain
Hold me, lead me, take me up
Shake this apathy that binds me
Show me where and how to go
Before my emptiness defines me