NEW!!!! amateur poem

[R.C. KITCHENS]

hey i am amateur poet that threw together this little poem please tell me what you think. I named it her thoughts

Her Thoughts

if she respected her freedom the way
she loved his beatings. Her life would be
filled with gold and riches. But instead
she puts up with him just to make ends
meet.

I dont think you need a period after "beatings" and agree "but instead" could be dropped. I wonder who "her thoughts" is from because you indicate "if she" implying another woman with thoughts about another woman. I'd like to see some more.