06-09-2013, 03:50 PM
it's not too bad but it feels more like a quote than a poem. i think the last line just saves it
if you use brevity use it, is 'but instead' needed? why is meet on it's own line?
give feedback elsewhere please.
if you use brevity use it, is 'but instead' needed? why is meet on it's own line?
give feedback elsewhere please.