06-09-2013, 01:26 PM
I don't like "olden times" or the fact that you used "fear" twice.
In fact I think your first line should be removed.
Solid imagery. Though there's a hesitance with this poem that I can't put my finger on.
In fact I think your first line should be removed.
Solid imagery. Though there's a hesitance with this poem that I can't put my finger on.
I'll be there in a minute.