I just had to get this one out, let me know how you feel about it

[UnicornRainbowCake]

I like the imagery you've created, it's nice and clear, but i fail to see a real story as well. The person could have been in a car crash or they could have had terminal illness. It is very unclear in that sense. Perhaps you want the generalisation, but it doesn't quite give the reader the emotion that it could if you linked it to an event.