To War! (Edit #1)

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First edit: (should I keep the third stanza?)

The creaking shadows of dominion's shore,
Move again! Like long lost lore.
The stirring death of your grandfather's war,
Will return! To new heights of gore.

The lightning's crack and thunder's roar,
At war! Are we once more.
The brandishing knives and uniforms tore,
For country! Cries the ignorant corp.

A vain full charge for a vain full day,
Hearken, friend! We've the fray.
To punish them for the brothers they slay,
On our bodies! Will theirs lay.

Original:

The creaking shadows of dominions shore,
Move again! Like long lost lore.
The stirring death of your grandfathers war,
Will return! In multiples of gore.

The lightnings crack and thunders roar,
At war! Are we, we once more.
The brandishing knives and uniforms tore,
For country! Comes the ignorant corp.