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Bad Boys Club
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06-06-2013, 07:06 AM
The edits have really helped this piece shine, its great to see the workshop fully functional like this, your opening line is great puts me right at the heart of the topic, I like the idea of the sage riding into town to cut through the bullshit. Billy's suggestion to change the second 'they' to 'and' is a good one. Thanks, great work. TOMH
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Bad Boys Club - by Alchemist - 05-28-2013, 10:55 PM
RE: Bad Boys Club - by UnicornRainbowCake - 05-29-2013, 03:46 AM
RE: Bad Boys Club - by Alchemist - 05-29-2013, 04:09 AM
RE: Bad Boys Club - by billy - 05-29-2013, 01:35 PM
RE: Bad Boys Club - by Alchemist - 05-30-2013, 01:47 AM
RE: Bad Boys Club - by billy - 05-30-2013, 08:09 AM
RE: Bad Boys Club - by Bunx - 06-04-2013, 05:17 AM
RE: Bad Boys Club - by Keith - 06-06-2013, 07:06 AM
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