06-06-2013, 12:06 AM
I really love this poem - but the last three lines are very weak in comparison. The last line I like the idea of, but I don't think it is pulled off with the sophistication you write with earlier on in this. I'd put some grammar in and see where it goes.
- Amy
(You wouldn't be surprised to know my parents did not christen me UnicornRainbowCake.)
(You wouldn't be surprised to know my parents did not christen me UnicornRainbowCake.)