The Eclipse of West Bumblefuck
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(06-05-2013, 10:27 AM)Volaticus Wrote:  Hi James,
I think this poem would read much easier, if you didn't capitalize every line, and if you added some periods and commas. I stumbled over the lines on my read-through, distracting me from what is said.
Thanks for the read.
- LB
Thanks for letting me know, I hope I made it a bit easier on the read now.
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The Eclipse of West Bumblefuck - by James - 06-05-2013, 07:58 AM
RE: The Eclipse of West Bumblefuck - by Volaticus - 06-05-2013, 10:27 AM
RE: The Eclipse of West Bumblefuck - by James - 06-05-2013, 10:56 AM
RE: The Eclipse of West Bumblefuck - by Volaticus - 06-05-2013, 11:47 AM
RE: The Eclipse of West Bumblefuck - by James - 06-06-2013, 06:43 AM
RE: The Eclipse of West Bumblefuck - by Volaticus - 06-06-2013, 07:33 AM



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