06-02-2013, 09:38 PM
Hello, I just joined the website, and I gave feedback to a few of you in "mild critique". I am brand new at writing poetry, and want suggestions on how to get better!
A warm summer’s night, the stars shining bright.
I look at the sky, and think about life.
What’s out there in space? Are we all alone?
How small is the earth, this place we call home?
Were we created, or was it by chance?
And isn’t it odd, how far we’ve advanced?
Will death be an end? Or rather a start?
Why is there hatred, In so many hearts?
Who has the answers, for all of my thoughts?
The temple or church? The monk or the mosque?
Too many questions, no answer in sight.
Just me and the stars, on this summer’s night.
A warm summer’s night, the stars shining bright.
I look at the sky, and think about life.
What’s out there in space? Are we all alone?
How small is the earth, this place we call home?
Were we created, or was it by chance?
And isn’t it odd, how far we’ve advanced?
Will death be an end? Or rather a start?
Why is there hatred, In so many hearts?
Who has the answers, for all of my thoughts?
The temple or church? The monk or the mosque?
Too many questions, no answer in sight.
Just me and the stars, on this summer’s night.