06-01-2013, 04:52 PM
(06-01-2013, 04:48 PM)Brownlie Wrote:No regrets here. Pretentious? Ok, I will go with that, if that is what you think. ;-)(06-01-2013, 04:26 PM)serge gurkski Wrote: rite poetry to you, when we talk.You have some noble sentiments here, if you're writing poetry about someone you are thinking about the other person and that can be a gift. I hate to call you pretentious but that is what comes across when you throw in too many literary names and use archaic words like thy. I think you can write much better than this, but I've been having a bad night and your optimism was uplifting. Hopefully you don't wake up in the morning with a pounding headache and a thousand regrets.
Why would I if I did not care?
How could I if I did not?
You tell me now!
What is next, you ask, I say:
Not yet written.
.
You can hurt me, but
you are the only one
allowed to
do so.
You should read some Heine:
He talks finely about love
and hurting.
.
On those rare vists to my mind
I question myself what I do.
I take a liking these gloomy days
in other people's love affairs
becauses it soothes me now.
You still have a life in front of you
to be filled with new love. - I like the hope I contemplated adding a smiley but they seem too ambiguous
It is just around the corner.
You simply need to look up
and that is all it takes
to love life once bloody more.
Just know that I now what I am talking,
your mock huffy,
he says so:
Of course – to spread banalities:
It ain't over till it is
and that is exactly how it is now
with us.
You know, I think that's fine lyrics
for just another
to be put down into
living
song.
So let there be song:
You say we differ;I ask how.
Is it about the Emerson quotes
about friendship I quoted to you?
What is it about?
Friendship is about
you don't have to return my favors,
but if you desire so:
return them to make me return them to you.
I read your eyes that ask:
Can we have that
without sex? Really?
Get lucky with my shrugs.
I write poetry to you when we talk.
Why would I do that
if I did not care?
Vutiou believe it: I read you.
The message I can't, it simply lies.
I can feel some other one's grief
completely.
I just love Italy
because on her coasts
I can feel the brise,
touching he rumbling waves of the sea.
I can feel a free bird's song in the wind.
Too many unsweet attitudes
in peoples these days.
They lost our moon
from which to look down
upon us, them and me.
Once the moon lights up again
they surely will see
what thy missed, I am talking
the richness of colorful life,the voice
lol - I don't know about lol in a poem
meant solely to please them
and easy their, our's. introduction
to death.
Jean Genet in Miracle de la Rose
with his friend facing the guillotine
played Boetius reborn in order to soothe.
In vain, in vain life and death., too.
In vain for all of us
it is to live.
Already covered Beckett, of course.
And may he be cursed because of that:
Leaving no options to choose from
for us to make a fine life,
but instead to sadly accept the fact that we'll die,
having been made so by our maker.
No praises from me for that.
That's our old existentialism Blues
Enough of sweet talking maybe, for now?
Up to get into it, into the real?
Into what matters?
But see: you loose me there,
because nothing really does.
Pra quem não sabe amar
fica esperando*
Because they do not know love waits for them.
Senhor, piedade
Lhes dê grandeza e um pouco de coragem *
Lord, have mercy
Give them a bit of grandeur and courage!
.................................................
*from Cazuza's Blues da Piedade lyrics
All my bestnesses to you
cheers
I must fix this thy thing. lol Must have slipped in. Uhh thse buggers old archaisms. Dust my broom.
fixed it. I read too much dickns as of late. you wanna know why I cherish him : becuz him is fucking funny. It entertains me just as much as you do striving. ;-)
On that note
behave you well, Sir!
I am already doing it again: writing another poem (just to please myself).
Feel, not invited, please, to leave your mark, as cute as you are (to some maybe).
re regrets: Brownlie: Just the other day I watched a Dickens or thomas Hardy (not sure) tv adaption.
Mom says to daughter: Will you never be embarrassed about what so ever.
That sicks. I admit, I have often been embarrassed by my own behavior.
But that was wrong. Because it "lulled" me. ;-)
I have chosen to not be embarrassed anymore.
I ll write sth about name-dropping as a short reference (in Chiese poetry). I see the problem, but I have good reasons to drop the names I drop.
